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Exodus by *MBryn:iconMBryn:

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I'm about to go eat something, but I just had to post this before I disappeared.

Felt the need to get some angsty poetry out of my system after visiting my father. This was the result, and I am rather pleased with it.

Comments and critiques welcome.

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~shenhai May 11, 2009, 8:11:45 PM
definitely angsty, but very justifiably so. I feel like you need a hug. :hug: your references to the milk and honey really give the poem life. maybe it's because I'm dehydrated, but I felt like I could feel the dust your car kicked up choking me. love you, be happy, eat chocolate! <3
:iconratchet27:
~Ratchet27 May 11, 2009, 8:22:11 PM
Whoa... Cool... Imagery....

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:worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship:
...:worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship::worship:

............................:worship:...........................
:iconsapphire-warg:
*sapphire-warg May 11, 2009, 8:27:56 PM
Angsty.... But amazing. The words form a very clear mental image.

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< ^.^> ~ :heart:
I wish I had god-powered door openers. - J Crowley
:iconangelicstubborness:
*Angelicstubborness May 11, 2009, 8:38:27 PM
T-T
*slaps bryns dad and runs away*

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The friends and people that we have met...never forget them..'
FFX
'Wait a sec, so you remember now?'....'The names Axel, got it memorized?'
Kingdom Hearts 2
'Say yer prayers lynx! not that it'll do ya any good!'
Chrono cross.
Ahhh gaming
:icontwili-imp21:
*Twili-Imp21 May 12, 2009, 7:40:41 AM
Damn...*hugs you tight*

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:blackrose::blackrose:You were my first love
The earth moving under me
Bedroom scent, beauty ardent
Distant shiver, heaven sent:blackrose::blackrose:

~Nightwish--Feel For You
:iconsongfisher:
~Songfisher May 12, 2009, 12:35:19 PM
Holy shiz.
"a vain idol with a few dried flowers on the altar,
a simple wooden caricature of the man"

I love this. XDDDD.

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"If all along, the fault is up for grabs, why cant you have it?
If its for sale what is your offer?
I will sell it for no less than what i bought it for.
Pay no more than absolutely zero....."

Jason Mraz--"Absolutely Zero
:iconjust-l00kin:
~Just-L00kin May 12, 2009, 4:18:04 PM
:iconohnoesplz: This is SO BITTER, AWESOME, and ACRIMONIOUS.
...
And I love it.

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"The pen is mightier than the sword." - Edward Bulwer-Lytton.
That's only true when you two are in a room, your opponent doesn't have a sword, and you have a pen.
:iconpersnicketese:
*Persnicketese May 12, 2009, 4:45:56 PM
I can taste the angst. It tastes vaguely like Red Bull.

Lovely poem dear. ^-^
:iconfiction-freak:
~fiction-freak May 13, 2009, 1:56:17 AM
This is great. Pity about the inspiration.
I could follow your journey as you wrote the imagery is that intense.

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A little more chlorine in the Gene Pool please! :B

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